a song a wrote.. tell me what u think..

[hollidogs]

the days we know

sipping on coke and rum from a plastic cup
you never know when you're done or when u've had enough
we'd only take the bus to get there
we didn't make a fuss and we didn't care

the days speed by fast you miss them
some seem to take so long and they never end
summer days are so fun before they go away
we thought that we were the ones to make them stay

and you see the lights are shining down on you, and they're blinding
but if you turn them off you wont know what to do, you wont find it

we were just killing time on the weekend
we never had a dime or enough to spend
city lights are shining they shine so bright
maybe we'll do this again on another night

and you see the lights are shining down on you, and they're blinding
but if you turn them off you wont know what to do, you wont find it

ye thats pretty much it.. the chorus repeats a bit with solos and instrumentals between...

[yourockradio]

Hard to tell until some music gets behind it. The words are good, but phrasing is always gonna mix it up a bit.

Good work though!