Let's hear what YOU think of the lyrics to my new song!

[almostamour]

Dreamer

After all is said and done
Will we still be staring at the sun?
And with all of this time alone
Don't you feel that it's inching closer to home?
We could leave right now
And beat the people
Or tonight to beat the weather
We could just lay here
We've got time, always & forever

Breathe in, you know me all too well
Let it out, you know that I don't kiss and
Tell me once, you've told me twice
And this time I'll be the one giving advice

Oh Dreamer
Pay attention to the road
It's all so complicated, it's why you feel so jaded
It's a world you've never know
Oh Dreamer
You're the air that I breathe
Now I feel vidincated, this broken heart belated
And all I did was believe
Oh Dreamer

I wouldn't say this too loud if I were you
But would you fly here in silence if I asked you to?
Look at that, it's 1000 miles away
You know I'd walk it if it had to be that way.
So let's talk 'til three o'clock
You can just preach our trust
And don't look now, but this distance
This distance has nothing on us

Oh Dreamer
Pay attention to the road
It's all so complicated, it's why you feel so jaded
It's a world you've never known
Oh Dreamer
You're the air that I breathe
Now I feel vindicated, this broken heart belated
And all I did was believe
Oh Dreamer

Oh Dreamer
Pay attention to the road
If you could just wake up for one second
And watch the mountains move below
Notice how fast they pass
Almost like my time with you
And the distance between you and them
Isn't near as far as I fell for you

Oh Dreamer
I've paid attention to the road
It's all so complicated, it's why we felt so jaded
It's a world we'd never known
Oh Dreamer
I'm the air that you breathe
And now you're vindicated, your swollen heart elated
And all you did was believe
Oh Dreamer


Thanks in advance for all feedback! Positive, negative, everything please!

[Reconsiderate]

got it recorded?

i thought this openning line was pretty neat:

[almostamour]

Not recorded yet, I'm waiting for an opportunity to record it on something better than a 10 dollar Wal-Mart microphone and Audition 1.5.

I don't really have the extra cash to buy anything, so I'm asking around town, friends and people who have that type of nice stuff.

I sure wish I could record it, it's my best one for sure.

[Reconsiderate]

[step8]

I agree with that. If too much time is spent planning perfection, the opportunity to perfect what we've started with may be lost. Inspiration needs fuel.

[Reconsiderate]